I am the usurper.WorKid wrote:I thought we had one of these?
I read this last night. Impressive, I thought. I mean, the writing style just works and has an easy flow to it. In both yours and Tiger's pieces the descriptions of stuff are really strong. The dialogue is good too.Tempy wrote:Bear in mind it's not finished, cos we're in for 2 weeks. It's just the start of something I'm still doing. But still, thought welcome.
Nah, it's not defensive. Thing is, the stuff I'm saying might miss the mark completely. I obviously don't know where the story's going either, so there's plenty I could be missing.Tempy wrote:As for the cowboy thing. I dunno if I'll tweak that. It's set could be set anywhere, but it is America. I don't think it's really significant, but it might be relevant in the later pages, but I'll keep drooping it in mind. I was also going for, if maybe not succeeding, with the idea that although Ethan talks like that, he certainly doesn't think like that, in fact he's perfectly elegant but how else are you meant to get across the wilds without that kind stoicism? Don't want to come off defensive, in fact I'm glad you've picked up on stuff like that because it means I'll have to work to contextualise them rather than being lazy about it.
Tempy wrote:I am looking forward to Stopharage and Tin this week. I had to bail because I have been busy with stuff, mainly involving flat hunting. It's taken the wind right out of my sails, but I'm hoping to get back into it. I'll keep updates to a minimum if I make any progress, simply because I would prefer not to tread on other folk's toes.
Stopharage wrote:Tempy/Tiger - I have read both your contributions, will post longer feedback tomorrow but liked both, although I don't think my stuff has the academic verve and rigour that yours do. Not sure what anyone will make of it now!
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