Aye, that's good that.tin_robot wrote:For the second time, I'm posting in here showing off about my daughter's poems, but she's won another Thing, and I really liked the poem, so I'm going to be Smug Dad again. (It's just a school thing, not a national one like before. She was given the title, and came up with this. The judge was Paul Hullah who is not just a Proper Poet, but was also once in a band called Teenage Dog Orgy, so he clearly knows his stuff.)
Anyway...
An Uncomfortable Truth
A fire inside my heart
that takes no colour,
nor a shape
That rises to my mouth and eyes
That burns up my thoughts,
leaving only that one flame
A fire so great the flames of which
cause me to choke and splutter,
altering every word I utter
And with each word
the fire is fed
building to its inevitable climax
the rising flames threatening to consume everything.
A water droplet falls instead.
Then a tsunami,
quenching the uncontrollable blaze,
putting it to rest,
till another fearful day.
davyK wrote:Getting into reading some poetry.
The last couple of deaths in my family (bro-in-law and father) have prompted me to write something about them. I've surprised myself by doing that. I think what I wrote isn't bad but I doubt I would post it here.
BUT there's a national poetry competition on at the mo - deadline is end of October - I might just stick one in.
tigerswiftly wrote:Incredibly impressed with your daughter's words, Tin. You must be proud.
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