Aaroncupboard wrote:SFX are doing a short zombie story competition (to be eventually judged by Darren Shan). I haven't written anything in ages but thought I would give it a go. The wife enjoyed my story, I will send it in and see if it gets anywhere. I think this link should take you to it. http://aaroncupboard.blogspot.co.uk/
- Reads a touch nicer to me, for example. Liked the description of Vun a lot. Perhaps add in a few more minor details of the MC entering the city? Perhaps pausing for a few moments, laying his hand on some manner of draconic architecture, give us a bit more tactile impression of the place? I'm a sucker for description and scene setting.The young magi regained his composure, the fleeting moment of fright already forgotten, and studied the arch’s text in closer detail
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