JonB wrote:Also, I don't really know what's going to happen after chapter 1.
This is certainly true, but I'm not really planning anything big. Just felt like writing some stuff down.Raiziel wrote:In my opinion this is the worst possible way to get something you are genuinely interested in writing done. I spent two years working over what I had in my head before I finally decided to do something about it. Half the battle is grabbing hold of an idea you genuinely believe in. Wish you luck, though.JonB wrote:Also, I don't really know what's going to happen after chapter 1.
JonB wrote:
Fair enough. I had wondered whether the chunks of exposition were a good idea, and perhaps I would spread it out more if I actually turned it into something longer. But it's also tied up with establishing the character of the narrator as someone who's not necessarily the best story teller - he has a tendency to meander and start lecturing about broader aspects of history and culture. And he's kind of aware of that but also kind of not. I suppose I imagined he'd get better and more focused at it as it went along. Although it may be me being a bad writer trying to hide behind a bad narrator. I dunno, maybe I should drop the whole meta element and tell a straight story.Stopharage wrote:Personally thought there was too much explanation in there, everything is laid on the plate for readers. My meagre appreciation of fantasy is that it's not spelt out that simply, you often have to pick at the detail to gain an understanding. Not saying that's right, but that seems to be the trend. Reads more like a teenlit approach than adult fantasy. On occasion it seemed like the tense was slightly out of kilter. Although I felt it meandered a bit, I thought it also told too much, too soon.
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